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Date: Mar 28, 2008, 13:43:01
Category: Literature -> Poetry -> Humor/Satire
Stars: 1
Favourites: 5
Tools used: leeches, fleam, scarificator
Time taken: not really long enough
Views: 26 (Full: 5)
Stupid Poem

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what's there to say? - I'm working on something better all right
This poem doesn’t understand
itself, or what it’s meant to be.
Like words, in lands where books are banned,
and crowds will browse through libraries
whose shelves are empty, full of air
it doesn’t have a sense of where
it’s going to, or why it’s there -
This poem penned by your fair hand.

This poem couldn’t comprehend
at all the rhyme or reason why
the sounds rebound at each line’s end,
and wouldn’t even think to try.
Its lines meander, as lost lambs
would wander, guileless, through waste lands
of squandered spondee, bland iambs -
This poem your fair hand has penned.

This poem, now it’s reached a third
dishevelled verse on shambling feet,
this ragged caravan of words
declares its rambling near complete.
And though it can’t remember how
it got here, where it’s going now,
my dear, to truth, you'll never bow -
You’ll start another, undeterred.
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This poem captures the essence of every poem I have written in the past six months, and myself as a poet, with frightening precision. And your rhyme and metre's brilliant. Such was my enormous twinge of self-empathy, I think I actually cried.

I'm going to blow my nose and dab my cheeks now. Maybe write a poem about it all.
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See how twp takes his own poetic banality and projects back onto his reader's own self image to creative the illusion of perceptivity and insight, like he can see into your soul. Creepy, na?
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Us poetically despondant souls gotta stick together.

Pass the tape?
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What Tenebrae said.

Except I'm not weeping.  Chuckling.  Oh yes, many chuckles.

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Charles chuckles while Salli sobs - and there in a nutshell is the human condition
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You touch it, it turns to gold.

Bloody talented bastard.


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What mother said, as i recall was "You touch it, you'll go blind"

- now where did i put my spectacles..?
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Love the sonics in this poem. The lambs and the title really give this piece a humorous touch.

'dishevelled' and 'guileless' are my favourite words of this poem and my favourite line is 'this ragged caravan of words'.

:thumbsup:
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Thanks - I'm glad you liked it, especially the ragged caravan
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*chuckle* This is a fun poem.
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