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Date: Sep 13, 2007, 00:11:30
Category: Literature -> Poetry -> Humor/Satire
Stars: 0
Favourites: 2
Tools used: A fly on the bus
Time taken: 1 hour, over 2 days
Views: 84 (Full: 5)
The Fly

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I wish I had the balls to write a serious poem about a serious issue. In the meantime, enjoy this silly thing.

Also, I haven't submitted written works before so I'm hoping I haven't got the fields mixed up.

ALSO ALSO, I am aware that the metre is fucked, I just haven't submitted anything in ages.
I got on the bus and went to my seat,
And besides, a fly was trampling his feet.
"Sir, your fare's not paid", I said
And then he blushed a subtle shade of red.
Guilt-ridden was I, and shamed
At belittling this creature's wily game;
I apologised and he said no trouble,
But asked my not popping the driver's bubble.
Seemed fair enough to me so I kept my silence,
If the driver knew he'd lose his license.
My stop came so I said goodbye,
Then someone sat down and squashed the fly!
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Cute. :3
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Haha, thanks.
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I laughed at that it is a very cute poem
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Thank you very much for the favourite.
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The rhyme is messed up to in a couple of places.

Cute poem never the less
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Thank you :P

If I wanted, I'd rewrite it with the intention of fixing everything, rather than creating anew, buuuuut I'm lazy and it wouldn't achieve much :P
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I smiled while i was reading the poem
and the drawing is cute ^^
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Thank you very much.
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